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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The
posibility
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possibility
 that
people
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 can purchase the same products anywhere in the
world
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, makes
country
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countries
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 more and more similar. There is a majority of the reasons why
this
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 is happening. One of the reasons is the development
od
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of
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 trading system all over the globe. New opportunities
at
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 online shopping, logistics,
banking
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and banking
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 contribute to
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 of trading. In my opinion, there is
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plenty of positive advantages.
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, any person from one country can buy something he likes from a website of
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 shop in the other country just by clicking the button on his laptop. It proves that all
people
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 are equal and they are free to buy everything they like. At present
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population
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the population
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 around the
world
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 has similar wishes in shopping.
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,
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 is a negative development, because countries becoming more similar
loose
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 their own cultural peculiarities in their national clothes, eating habits and
life style
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lifestyle
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. The similar preferations
in
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for
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drinkings
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drinking
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for example
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 drinking cola or beer in different countries, which are well-spread, assist in developing
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common
problem
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such
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 as obesity and alcohol addiction. In
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 I would like to say that becoming more similar is not negative. In some cases it helps
people
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 to be closer to each other, to understand better. Availability of the same products anywhere in the
world
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 allows
people
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 to have similar habits in nutrition and wearing clothes and mainly shows that these products have
practical
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the practical
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necessity
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necessities
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. As an example, wearing jeans is popular all over the
world
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, because they are
convinient
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convenient
in
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 casual life and that’s why became very popular and highly purchased
clothe
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clothes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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