Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

Some countries choose to do
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specialised facilities
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for
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certain
athletes
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of providing
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for everyone, I
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really choose my opinion
cause
if
i
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was an athlete
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wouldn't want untrained
people
to come to my place and
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injury
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, If
i
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was a normal teenager
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want to go and visit places like that. Now that
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look at the story closely I think there should be
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different
hours for
both
people
and
profecinal
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professional
athletes
. If they
both
had
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different
timings
then
no one would be bothered and the place
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could earn more
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profit
In
this
way where the time after the athlete training will be for normal
people
to have fun and
athletes
can work as couches and couch those untrained
people
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willing to try new things, In
this
way all part's would be happy and the country would not have to
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build
another
facilitie
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facility
. In my
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perspective
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that's the best choice and it's low in cost and would please
both
sides
cause
all parts of
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society
should be happy and pleased. In
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I
dont
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don't
think it's going to be a problem for the
athletes
or the
people
cause
at the end
of the day
both
of them are doing the things they want and believe that can make them happy In so many
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ways. They can discuss a lot of things In between
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a part of the facility for children only that would be safer for them and
wont
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cause
the parents to worry.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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