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Being a celebrity – such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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In today’s advanced world that the internet has changed it into a global village
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 give us a wide range of information one of which is about celebrities. In
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 regard, famous people like superstars and athletes can have some problems or take some
advantages
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 in their personal
life
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 I tend to believe more in the negative sides, I will explain both sides. On the one hand, being a celebrity can have some benefits, particularly emotionally, when they get the public’s attention they cannot be bored and with getting a surge of excitement they may experience a more pleasurable time in their
life
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, making money with your hobby can make you a lucky and satisfied individual. As the most famous actors and sportspeople have been paid enormously since their popularity in society.
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, there are some drawbacks to
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 group of the population’s
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there is a lack of privacy which may lead to anxiety and stress. Their situation makes it hard for them to feel comfortable when they are in the community. In fact, mostly they should behave in the way that their followers or fans prefer,
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, they can hardly be themselves. With
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 it will be prone to involve a deep depression as we can see several celebrities who have committed suicide for
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 pressures. In conclusion, despite the big advantage of being famous which causes absorbing others appraise, there is a huge problem with being in the spotlight that takes away a feeling of convenience and self-assured in
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 of celebrities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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