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The diagram below shows how instant noodles is manufactured

The diagram below shows how instant noodles is manufactured
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Given diagrams illustrate the process of
instant
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noodles
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 production which is formed at eight stages. First trucks transfer flour from storage soil to the factory where
instant
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noodles
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 production.,
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secondly
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 it is mixed with water and oil by a mixer machine.
then
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 it is rolled into dough sheets by a roller. After ,that it is converted to dough strips by a machine. In the next ,process it is converted into
noodles
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 discs. In the sixth stage ,it is cooked with oil and dried. in the seventh it is sent into many cups and vegetables are placed into cups
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 the
noodles
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. the
last
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 stage involves labelling and sealing the cups.
After
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this
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 ,process the
instant
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noodles
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 are ready to distribute in the market and consume.
overall
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 the production of
instant
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noodles
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 is carried out in eight steps and all steps are done by machines. from storage flour until labelling and sealing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words instant, noodles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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