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The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.

The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.
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The first bar graph indicates the number of hospital beds per thousand of
population
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the population
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 and the second table one gives information on the
expetiture
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expenditure
 of Governments and average
life
expectacy
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expectancy
 in three
countires
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countries
counties
.
Overall
,
Japan
 allocates the largest amount of beds to patients followed by Germany. With regards to spending, the government of the United
states
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States
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 spends the biggest amount of budget on health care
while
 it has the shortest
life
 expectancy.
According to
 the first graph,
it is clear that
Japan
 accounts for the largest population recording 14 thousand, which is nearly three times as large as other countries
except
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 Germany at 8
thousands
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thousand
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. The third largest figure is
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 marking around 4.2 thousand but the gap between it and that for
spain
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Spain
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 which is the smallest is quite narrow. Looking at the second table, we can see that the spending of
United
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the United
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states
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States
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for
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on
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 health
comprise
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comprises
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 the largest size at 6,719$ despite the shortest
life
 expectancy at 78. It is approximately twice larger
than
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as
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that
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the
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of
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apply
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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. When it comes to the figure for
Japan
, it showed a reverse trend with
United
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the United
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states
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States
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.
Japan
 spend 2,581$ per person which is the smallest and the figure for
Japan
's average
life
 expectancy is 83 which is the longest in
this
 table.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • healthcare resources
  • life expectancy
  • per capita
  • modern medical equipment
  • correlate
  • accessibility
  • average lifespan
  • healthcare policies
  • government healthcare spending
  • disparities
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • global health inequalities
  • technological advancements
  • telemedicine
  • AI diagnostics
  • health outcomes
  • public health initiatives
  • vaccination programs
  • preventive healthcare
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