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Economic progress is one way to measure the success of a country, while some people think there are other factors. What other factors should be considered? Within these factors, do you think anyone is more important than economic progress?

It is believed by many that economic
progress
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 is the only way to measure a
country
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's
success
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.
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, others think that there are countless other
factors
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 to be considered that contribute to the
success
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 of a
country
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.
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 paragraph is to discuss both views and give opinions regarding the issue. It is true that economic
progress
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 is a way to measure a
country
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's
success
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, since improving economically can grant a
country
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 countless opportunities.
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, the US once suffered an economic crisis in the 1930s, called “The Great Depression”, that shocked its developing economy, stunting its growth and affecting numerous countries around the world. The US President Roosevelt offered a solution
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 the total reformation and improvement of the economy. He provided jobs, created opportunities for the unemployed and brought the US back
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 the course of its economic development. His work is considered
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one of the most significant contributions to the
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's economy in the
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history of economic progression.
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 is what made
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 great today.
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 economic
progress
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 must be valued, other
factors
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 should
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 be considered.
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, the health factor of a
country
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 is especially important.
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 is the reason why countries spend billions of dollars
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 developing novel medicine to cure illnesses,
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 as cancer, or building hospitals to facilitate the constant need
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 healthcare, or raising countless funds for charity to support people in need and provide them with free healthcare. Another example is the
overall
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 well-being of the people in a
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. Parks
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 and other public amenities are built in order to improve the citizens' health and well-being. Countries
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 encouraged public events
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 well as TV live shows with figures like Conan O Brian. These things all contribute to the well-being of the people in a
country
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. In conclusion, it is understandable to believe that economic
progress
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 only measurement of a
country
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's
success
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, but it should be considered that the
factors
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 mentioned above and numerous other
factors
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also
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 contribute to the
success
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 and development of a
country
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, and that they are all equally important.

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task response
Clarify your view in the intro and restate it in the conclusion.
coherence
Link ideas with clear signs like first, also, and in addition.
accuracy
Use only facts and names you know; correct spellings.
development
Give strong, clear examples that fit each idea.
lexical
Keep simple language and check word choice.
content
The essay shows both sides of the issue and has a final view.
analysis
It uses real examples to back ideas at some points.
structure
It follows a plan with intro, two body parts, and a ending.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic progress
  • social well-being
  • healthcare
  • education
  • social equality
  • environmental sustainability
  • sustainable development
  • natural resources
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • resource depletion
  • political stability
  • rule of law
  • democratic governance
  • corruption
  • quality of life
  • life expectancy
  • work-life balance
  • happiness
  • technological development
  • infrastructure development
  • standard of living
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