Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of working from home.

There is an argument that people who
work
from
home
have a benefit and negative
impact
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.
Although
working from
home
can produce a number of merits,
i
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personally disagree with
idea
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the idea
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for several reasons. Let’s
stat
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by looking at the advantages of working from
home
.
First,
not only it helps them have a comfortable mood environment, but
also
it may
be protect
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health
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their health
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or
better
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placed and more willing to
work
flexible hours
such
as earlier or later in the day or even at weekends.
This
can help people meet certain needs.
For example
, the outbreak of the coronavirus (COVID-19) pandemic in March 2020 made
for
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commercial premises have to shut down in response to the government's requirements to protect public health so individuals can
work
from
home
a
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way not be
force
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by others or focus
work
more,
therefore
increase income.
Moreover
, everyone doesn't have to waste time
such
as
reduce
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the risk of accidents on the road,
save
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and save
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on commuting costs.
For example
,
in
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the difficult economic covid pandemic will
educe
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fuel and vehicle costs. Another drawback is that low promotion chances because there are few opportunities to approach and interact with colleagues,
the
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working style becomes unprofessional.
For example
, it affects
work
discipline, so the opportunity for advancement is slower. Especially, they can't find business and
work
together more difficult.
Consequently
, they don't get to see their colleagues often,
industrial
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and industrial
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exchanges to solve problems should minimize industry results. In conclusion, despite the advantages of the main goal of working from
home
,
i
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contend
this
it
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has
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a significantly
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significantly
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effect on
user’s
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user
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demand.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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