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Some people believe that all the children in school are required to learn at least one foreign language. However, others say that those who are not talented do not have to learn. What is your opinion?

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Many individuals are of the opinion that every teenager should know more than one
language
.
While
 others believe that it is not necessary. I think every student at school shall try to study a different
language
 from what they already know.
This
 is that way because it may come out useful in the future and allow you to travel more freely around the world. The world is all about communication. Knowing another speech is very admirable these days. Which is because it allows you to communicate with more people.
For instance
, when you decide to go abroad, where no one knows your mother tongue, it is essential to know the
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 of their
language
. Because without it you may not be able to sightsee the country comfortably or talk with foreigners freely .
However
, knowing their speech you may even end up making
new
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friend
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 there which would be an amazing experience. Another important thing is that people often use their memory. Learning a
language
 is a perfect way of training,
practicing
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 and improving
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memory.
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 when my friend studied Spanish for a long time, her memory drastically improved.
As a
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 she ended up not only knowing Spanish but
also
 with the ability to remember things easily. She got to the point where she could remember what she just read. In conclusion, juveniles should learn at least one foreign
language
 as it may improve the quality of their life and give them new practical skills. Which may make them happier and
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