Some people think that the only purpose of working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge.
some
people
believe that the way to earn money is Use synonyms
goal
of hard Add an article
the goal
a goal
working
so nowadays, individuals make a purpose to achieve their success. In my opinion, working hard is not Replace the word
work
only
way to earn money because there are several Add an article
the only
way
to be successful.
Change to a plural noun
ways
Firstly
, Linking Words
in
some countries has financial issues because Change preposition
apply
a lots
of Correct the article-noun agreement
a lot
lots
people
find simple ways to get a job so the Use synonyms
white
occupations have been decreasing since Correct quantifier usage
number of white
beginning
of Add an article
the beginning
20th
century. Correct article usage
the 20th
Secondly
, Linking Words
balance
of Add an article
the balance
work
Use synonyms
need
to be encouraged to improve developing countries. Change the verb form
needs
In these
days, individuals prefer Change preposition
These
blue
job to Correct article usage
a blue
education
Add an article
the education
of
university because they decide Change preposition
at
easy
ways to make Change preposition
on easy
a
money. Remove the article
apply
Moreover
, some scientists said that purpose must be had in order to get more Linking Words
motivation
.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Linking Words
people
in developing counties have to gain Use synonyms
a knowledge
from Remove the article
knowledge
a piece of knowledge
university
Add an article
the university
after
that decide occupation that comfort for them because uncomfortable Correct word choice
and after
work
has Use synonyms
negative
effect Add an article
a negative
for
Change preposition
on
people
Use synonyms
for example
Linking Words
,
if someone had decided Remove the comma
apply
wrong
job, they could not feel happiness Change the article
the wrong
from
the life. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, Linking Words
motivation
is taken from Use synonyms
contents
to Fix the agreement mistake
content
work
hard. In my opinion, Use synonyms
Motivation
is the most useful thing because it can help to Use synonyms
work
in Use synonyms
hard
occupation so there Correct article usage
a hard
needs
to be any special Change the verb form
need
contents
for individuals.
Fix the agreement mistake
content
To sum up
, everyone has to have several Linking Words
purpose
Change to a plural noun
purposes
such
as Linking Words
choose
Wrong verb form
choosing
correct
occupation and Correct article usage
the correct
unisersity
because some occupations have been Correct your spelling
university
removing
to be Wrong verb form
removed
digital
world. The most Add an article
the digital
nessessary
thing is to gain and provide happiness Correct your spelling
necessary
from
life. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, Linking Words
Motivation
is provided Use synonyms
from
Change preposition
by
influncers
who is Correct your spelling
influencers
famous
person.Add an article
a famous
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