Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays a lot of
people
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have
not
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no
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educations
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education
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.
Also
,
this
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is countries which have not
development
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developed
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.
For instance
, Africa and India. Unfortunately,
this
is
big
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a big
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problem because
persons
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people
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can not read and write. So, I want to describe
this
topic. On the one hand,
a
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education
has benefits, but
on the other hand
, there
is
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are
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some drawbacks and
a
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issue which much be discussed and solved. In
this
essay
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both sides will be explained and supported with examples. First of all,
people
who graduated
a
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university and a school or only school
smarter
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are smarter
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then
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than
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persons
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people
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who don’t go
in
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the
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school. Of course, we have unusual exceptions.
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is
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society doesn’t have
education
and become
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more successfully
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successfully
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successful
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then
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than
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people
with
education
.
For example
, Henry Ford graduated
Detroit
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from Detroit
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Business Institute and Bryant and Stratton College. Fortunately, he became
successful
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a successful
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person
.
Also
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he created innovation, which help
people
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problem
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“Conveyor”.
Second,
unfortunately, a lot of
people
doesn’t
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don’t
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have
education
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an education
the education
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. They don’t know how
read
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to read
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and write. So, countries help each other.
For example
, they create exchange
education
, which
give
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two degrees. Honestly, not each country can give
person
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a person
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graduated
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graduation
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because
weak
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of weak
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economic
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economy
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.
On
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the world we have examples,
when
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of when
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person
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a person
the person
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doesn’t have
education
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the education
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to become more
successfully
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successful
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then
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than
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person
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a person
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graduated
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who graduated
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university
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from university
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. But
this
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these
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is exceptions.
To sum up
, I want to say, that
people
must graduate
universities
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from universities
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and schools
for
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apply
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to be smart.
Also
, I think that society should learn all
life
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about life
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. They can buy
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the course
a course
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course
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courses
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and
studying
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study
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something new. Because
a
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apply
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education
is important.
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