Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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not
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no
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education
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, this
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these
development
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For instance
, Africa and India. Unfortunately, this
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problem because Add an article
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people
this
topic. On the one hand, a
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apply
education
has benefits, but on the other hand
, there is
some drawbacks and Correct subject-verb agreement
are
a
issue which much be discussed and solved. In Change the article
an
this
essay
both sides will be explained and supported with examples.
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people
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from a
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are smarter
then
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people
in
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to
the
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apply
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successful
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than
people
with education
. For example
, Henry Ford graduated Detroit
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from Detroit
successful
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a successful
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. Also
he created innovation, which help Add a comma
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people
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the problem
Second,
unfortunately, a lot of people
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to read
For example
, they create exchange education
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gives
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a person
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graduation
weak
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of weak
economic
. Replace the word
economy
On
the world we have examples, Change preposition
In
when
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of when
person
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a person
the person
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than
person
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a person
graduated
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who graduated
university
. But Change preposition
from university
this
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these
To sum up
, I want to say, that people
must graduate universities
and schools Change preposition
from universities
for
to be smart. Change preposition
apply
Also
, I think that society should learn all life
. They can buy Change preposition
about life
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the course
a course
course
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courses
studying
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study
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