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Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Choosing where to live can be the most challenging decision to make. Most
people
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 argue that living in flats is better than living in houses.
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 believe that
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 makes
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 feel so alone and sad. In my opinion, I strongly agree that high-rise buildings must be avoided for two reasons.
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living in big
apartments
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 poses some health risks.
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 means that
,
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 high
buildings
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 residents spend most of
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 time on their own having no time to mingle with other
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, they develop depression and anxiety.
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 they are surrounded by
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, they feel like they are strangers.
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, staying
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 one of the top
apartment
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 may cause someone
feel
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 isolated and develop social problems.
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, flats are congested and busy, they can have over 500
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 residing there. Having a lot of
people
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 staying in one place causes many problems
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 as noise and uncleanliness in the foyers.
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, some argue that
apartments
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 are better. They believe that living in
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 arrangements makes them feel safe. Being surrounded by over 500
people
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 makes it hard for criminals to
breakthrough
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 one apartment.
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, most tenants prefer living in flats
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 an individual
house
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.
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, it is cheaper to rent a flat than a
house
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.
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, a
house
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 in high-rise
buildings
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building
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 costs $450 per week
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 a
house
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 costs $1000 per week.
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, it is affordable to stay in big
apartments
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. In conclusion, most
people
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 choose not to live in
apartments
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due to
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healthy
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 risks
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 as anxiety and depression and the level
noise
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of noise
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 caused by other residents.
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 others think that
apartments
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 are advantageous because of their affordability and a sense of security.
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