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WRITING TASK 1 The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given graph depicts
a
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 amount of
shops
 separated by which closed and which opened from 2011 to 2018 in one specific country.
Overall
 it can be seen that there was a sharp decrease in the
number
 of closed
shops
 in the middle of the given period. We
also
 can see that
shops
 that opened demonstrate a slight fall during the years. In 2011, the
number
 of
shops
 that were opened showed
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 highest peak of all the given timeframe, it was accounting for almost 9,000.
However
, it showed a slight decrease in the following years, and remained stable after 2015, achieving 3,000 in 2018.
Moreover
, in 2013 the
number
 of
shops
 that closed in that time reached a peak of almost 7,00,
then
 it suffered a dramatic fall in 2015, accounting for just 800, after that the
number
 of closed
shops
 presented
a
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 increase, and remained stable until 2013, being responsible for 5,000.
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