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Forests are the lungs of the earth. Destruction of the world's forests can result in the death of the world we currently know. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#forests #lungs #earth #destruction #world #death
Forests
 are considered the lifeline of
world
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 just like lungs are imminent life-saver for human beings.
Hence
,
utmost
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 care and respect
is
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are
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 expected to be given to
forests
 for
it's
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their
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 normal operation. Destruction
to
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of
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 mother nature in any form
to
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of
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 life and habitat can lead to a
distrubance
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disturbance
 in an ecological balance.
This
 essay will argue why destruction to
earth
 is needed to be avoided at any cost as Global warming and
food
 shortage are the major consequences to be faced later. Many people believe that conserving
forests
 is not their
responsibilites
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responsibilities
responsibility
 as they have not destroyed
it
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them
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. Individuals are of the
opinions
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opinion
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 that they are not personally
inflecting
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inflicting
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 pain to the
forests
 by cutting down
tress
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trees
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 and using
it's
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 resources.
Morever
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Moreover
, they feel that their daily usage of device or
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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are
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is
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 necessary for maintaining their freedom and independence. Some individuals believe a single
persons
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 efforts will not help much.
For instance
, in developed countries like
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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 people
people
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travel to work in personal cars to achieve their self-interests and freedom.
Hence
,
such
 thinking is completely
presposterous
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preposterous
. Preservation of
forests
along with
 wildlife habitat is quite necessary for sustainable and effective balance in life-cycle. Owing to the high usage and combustion of fossil fuels,
significant
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 average temperature has risen on parts of
earth
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the earth
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, ultimately on track leading to global warming.
In addition
, consequences of it are seen with the
sever
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severe
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 weather conditions prevailing and damaging the
food
 and wildlife. In 2020, owing to the hot and extreme weather
condition
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conditions
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 California had the lowest water levels, followed by
million
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millions
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 of acres burning off leading to even
further
shortage
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shortages
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 in
food
 supplies,
along with
the
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poor air quality
till
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in
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 the mid-west states of
USA
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the USA
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.
Secondly
,
with
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the disappearance of
forests
 leads to wild
animal
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animals
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loosing
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losing
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habitat
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their habitat
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 and ultimately coming out
in
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into
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 cities leading to chaos and fear.
Overall
, forest conservation is
necssary
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necessary
 from global warming and
food
 supplies standpoint.
This
 essay argued why
forests
 are lungs to
mother
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Mother
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Earth
 and
it's
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its
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 conservation is an absolute imperative at any incurred cost. I strongly believe, because of the
interpendence
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interdependence
independence
 of living and biological substances on
earth
, a single
distrubance
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disturbance
 in the balance can have severe and
lift-threatening
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life-threatening
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 consequences for life and ultimately we can die.
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