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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year
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The chart illustrates the changes in means of transport used in England between the years 1985 and 2000, the measuring unit is
miles
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 travelled per person in each year. In general, some vehicles were more preferred in the year 2000 than in the past
while
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 some decreased in the number of
miles
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such
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 as bicycles or local buses.
Overall
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, the total
miles
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 of all modes increased significantly. It is noticeable that other means and cars had the highest rise of
miles
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 between 1985 and 2000, which were 135 and 1607, respectively.
Moreover
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, the number of
miles
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 per person in some vehicles
such
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 as taxis or long-distance buses
also
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 increased by approximately 70 for each means.
On the other hand
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, there are modes which were used less by the people in England
such
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 as a bicycle or local bus. As can be seen in the table, the bicycle slightly decreased by 10
miles
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 in the year 2000 and the local bus was
also
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 less than 70
miles
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 in 1985.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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