Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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number of people. There are enormous reasons to support their decision
along with
some pros and cons.
This
essay will shed light on it.
To begin
with, staying
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place
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life
is easy and
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convenience
. Most people have their own houses which means they do not need to pay any cost of living.
Secondly
, they spend their
life
close to their loved ones. It makes their
life
beautiful and charming.
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, having friends and family during
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phase
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in
life
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as there is always someone to pat on your back to fight with hardships.
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who lives with loved ones overcome difficulties in
life
and can escape from isolation as well.
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to the other side of
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, keeping your feet
on
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place
keeps you away from the opportunities to grow. What I mean by
this
is that every
place
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limited opportunities
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growth and in order to accomplish something bigger in
life
, one
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to go
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places which
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them success in their particular field.
For example
, a large number of
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moved to
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Canada
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every year to raise
up
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the level of their
life
and to become successful.
To conclude
, spending
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life
on
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could be fruitful but going out from limited space presents a bundle of opportunities and makes
life
successful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Settlement
  • Hometown
  • Roots
  • Community
  • Emotional attachment
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Social network
  • Bond
  • Safety
  • Proximity
  • Support system
  • Heritage
  • Limited options
  • Risk aversion
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Unfamiliarity
  • Exploration
  • Adventurous spirit
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