Mobile phones and the internet could have many benefits for older people. However, this age group uses technology the least . What are the benefits for old people of using mobile phones and internet. How can we encourage them to use this new technology?

In
this
contemporary epoch, technology made life more convenient for everyone.
Whereas
, elder ones used less modern gadgets and
internet
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. In my opinion, there are many advantages for older people of using smartphones and
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internet
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such
as communication, exercise and
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and many other
and
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some
another methods
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to encourage them, which I shall discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, owning to several reasons that emphasise, the benefits of
mobile
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phone
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phones
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towards elder people. Primarily, as many children
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to
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far from home for their career
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.So, older
one's
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want to talk
them
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and they like to use
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a smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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for calling purposes.
Moreover
, some individuals liked to go walking and
exercises
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and they wanted to check the number of calories.
Thus
, they can burn more to become
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person
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.
Therefore
, there are many positive effects and the best way to
usage
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the usage
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of mobile
phone
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phones
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.
On the other hand
, there are some aspects that determine, the methods to encourage all age
group
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of individuals to use
this
technology. To a greater extent reason is
that
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advance
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function of the mobile phone.
For instance
, iPhone
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a function that measures
heart
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the heart
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rate of the
person
, which
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inform
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that
person
about their health and there is
emergency
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the emergency
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calling of
IOS
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.
This
software helps in bad situations
such
as if
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preson
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person
prison
had an accident at any place .Immediately, the software of iPhone calls
to
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the family of that
person
.
As a result
,
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things encourage the users to attach
with
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the technology.
To conclude
, it is clear from the above discussion that there are abundant merits of smartphone
qnd
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and
internet
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, which makes
people
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lives more convenient and comfortable in every field.
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