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In some citites and towns all over the world ,the high volume of traffic is a problem.what are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem.

#citites #towns #world #volume #traffic #actions
The pie charts display the online shopping sales for retail departments in Canada from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that higher
education
 dominated and received the highest record
all
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in all
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 years. To be specific, in
term
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terms
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 of
education
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the education
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 sector,
Health
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the Health
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 and human resources ratio
was
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flucturated
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fluctuated
 starting with 14% in 1980, 20% in 1990 and 10% in
last
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 year.
Similarly
, transportation
also
 encountered
this
 trend from 16% at
start
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 to sharply declining at 6% in 1990 and
skyrocketed
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 to 22% in 2000.
On the other hand
,
although
 higher
education
 took most of
sales
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the sales
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, K-12
education
 and other faced slowly decreased from 25% to 18% and 6% to 1% respectively. Inversely,
steady
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a steady
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 increase was found in Environment services from 4% in 1980 to 9% in 2000.
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