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In some countries, Criminal trials are shown on television for the public.Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#countries #trials #television #advantage #outweigh
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people in a country, and
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 could bring a lot of shame to
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However
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social
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 of benefits from it. In conclusion,
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the upside
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