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Your friend who lives in another city has opened a new gift shop. You were unable to attend the inauguration due to an important competition you are a part of. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter you must Congratulate your friend Explain your inability to attend Mention that you will visit soon

#friend #lives #city #gift #shop #inauguration #competition #part #inability #visit
john
whats
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 going on,
i
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 feel very happy after listening
about
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to
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 your new gift shop.
this
 is the best way to start your new journey.
its
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it's
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 very embracing for me to not attend your opening ceremony of
shop
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the shop
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due to
 some medical emergencies.
moreover
 when
i
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I
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free
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am free
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 from here surely
i
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I
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 will visit
to
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you
ver
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very
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 soon. that's a proud moment for me that you step forward towards
you
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your
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successful
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a successful
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 life.my
cousion
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cousin
 met with an accident
on
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last
 night
due to
 which
i
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 had to go to
hospital
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the hospital
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for
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the take care of him.
in
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this
 situation
i
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 really forgot about your ceremony
of
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at
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new
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the new
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 shop. his condition had very critical but
doctor
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the doctor
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 said he
normal
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is normal
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 now. after one week doctor will discharge him from
hospital
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the hospital
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. in the next
week
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i
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also
 got 3
days
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days'
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 holiday from my office at that time
i
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I
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 surely come
thier
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their
there
 to meet you. your love
annie
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