The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.

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The maps illustrate the changes in the city of HCM between 1995 and the present time. It is clear from the graph that residential construction has increased with new households and buildings.

Also

, the main differences in city development throughout the given period are the farmland turned into a golf side, the loss of a forest park and the appearance of the tennis courts in its place.

While

, in 1995, there was a line of shops and fishmarket nearby the seaside, now they had been replaced by restaurants and apartments respectively.

In contrast

, the fishing port operated in 1995 had been deconstructed and does not exist anymore.

According to

the data, hotels and cafes remain in their place nowadays, as it has been in 1995.

However

, a car park had been built adjacent to the mentioned attractions.

To conclude

whereas

the city went through serious changes in attractions, its scheme remains as it was considered in the year 1995.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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