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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extend do you think is a positive trend?

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In recent years, shopping was consider by many
people
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 as a pleasurable task rather than a regular household chore. I personally believe it is a good development because of the advancement of the shopping
stores
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons and give my opinion. I would argue that decades ago,
people
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 shopped out of necessity. They were required to purchase essential things
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 as food and clothing for family needs. As observed especially in women,
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, developed a sense of adaptability and resiliency; now they view shopping as part of their pastime to give themselves a break from long hours of being home.
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, the advancement of these changes brought a happy effect on
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's outlook on life.
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, the progress of the
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' physical structures and the unlimited options.
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 attracts shoppers to keep on coming back either to buy or just window shop. The tedious experience the buyers felt before is incomparable to the excitement of the millennials and similar shoppers
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 the advancement of shops and grocery
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. The malls,
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, is a one-stop
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 where everything is there from lingerie shops, food courts, cinemas, and grocery
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 with various attractions and air conditions, unlike before
people
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 buy items on the street stalls, or in a town market.
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, shopping has become a leisure activity and pleasure for many. In conclusion,
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 shopping was considered before as a routine job,
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 innovations
people
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 now regard shopping as a hobby. I personally believe that it is a positive change, considering how it changed peoples' views on performing their daily task and turning it into enjoyable and pleasurable experiences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • retail therapy
  • materialism
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • financial instability
  • environmental impact
  • social interaction
  • community building
  • emotional satisfaction
  • advertising influence
  • shopping habits
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