Now a day the surveillance is happening at almost all public places. Is it good or perceived bad by people? What are advantages and disadvantages?

With technological advancement and artificial
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the system is becoming stronger and
secure
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. Whether
surveillance
systems is constructive
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destructive approach is
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debated topic these days. There are several advantages and disadvantages
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statement. One evident merit is having installed cameras
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public places
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secure environment.
This
is because these cameras are helping
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to keep
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record of unwanted thefts and crimes.
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,
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police in 2010, was able to
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a gang of 10 people who were involved in different crimes with the help of these cameras that were present in
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, malls and on the streets. Another auspicious side of having
surveillance
on traffic lights is to track the people who
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the traffic rules.
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safety by preventing
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road side accidents by strict watch by
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all the time.
Apart from
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, in India it is not common to express
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feeling in
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public,
hence
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the obedient culture of
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.
However
, there are some obvious drawbacks as well that cannot be ignored.
Firstly
,
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are not accurate every time.
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is
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technological breakdown or wrong interpretations may release a wrong message to the public.
Secondly
, there is
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of data leaking which may hinder someone’s privacy and safety. In conclusion,
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accept that there are
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demerits of having
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system
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and can
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be
strength by improving
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the
systems. I believe it
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constructive
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approach
due to
various benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Surveillance
  • Security
  • Crime prevention
  • Footage
  • Public safety
  • Privacy concerns
  • Consent
  • Distrust
  • Behaviour
  • Data management
  • Data breaches
  • Misuse of information
  • Targeting
  • Socio-political tensions
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