The problems caused by work-related stress (such as lack of productivity) have become a concern for both employers and workers. What do you think are the main causes of work- related stress and how they can be avoid?
Some people believe that jobs can have a negative effect on people's lives,
such
as being more nervous and anxious. There are solutions that can be used to avoid these issues, either by the employee himself or by the manager, Linking Words
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as providing mental health consultations.
Some of the most common problems are the Linking Words
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of productivity, unrealistic expectations, and Use synonyms
lack
of support. Use synonyms
Firstly
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of productivity is usually caused by the work environment, Use synonyms
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as being in a high workload place. Some employers provide their co-workers with many tasks without cooperating and being humanised. Linking Words
Secondly
, unrealistic expectations can have vital reasons, Linking Words
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as the employee's huge imagination, so they believe that Linking Words
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job can make them rich and will solve all their financial problems. Linking Words
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, after they join the company, they take a big loan from the bank. Linking Words
Finally
, Linking Words
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lack
of motivation which would cause some concerns for both the employer and the worker.
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On the other hand
, to control stress, there are some solutions that can be used. Rewarding worker is a perfect method to encourage and motivate them which has a positive impact that can reflect their performance in a good side. Linking Words
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their healthy mentality. Linking Words
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, giving them financial awards is considered one of the successful methods.
In conclusion, it is argued that some worker faces some difficulties in their work life because of Linking Words
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of motivation. I believe that rewarding them is a good method to be used for them.Use synonyms
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Task Response
Try to provide more specific examples or evidence that clearly support your points. For instance, instead of just mentioning 'financial awards,' you could describe how such rewards have improved productivity in other companies.
Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
The essay addresses the main causes of work-related stress, providing a structured approach with clear points.
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There is a clear introduction that sets the context for the discussion and a conclusion that summarizes the main points effectively.
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