‘Prisons are an expensive way of making bad people worse’ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Xuan Bac is one of
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people whom I follow on social media. He is a famous and handsome actor in Viet Nam. I have known about him since 2019,
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was watching TV with my family
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accidentally saw him was action as “Nam Tao” on
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“ the final meeting of the
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”. I
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about him because he acted so
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and next I searched
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him immediately and follow him on
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. On his
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he usually
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about his daily life and his family. What a funny and happy family. to explain why I followed him on
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I think it
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he made me interested in his talent, happiness and beauty
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial burden
  • infrastructure
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitate
  • incarceration
  • non-custodial measures
  • humane
  • criminal behavior
  • stigma
  • custodial
  • correctional strategies
  • societal safety
  • broader social consequences
  • alternative methods
  • rehabilitation programs
  • educational initiatives
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