Many people around the world are still relying on the private car as their major mean of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest some solutionsit

It has been universally accepted that the problem of
immence
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immense
use
of private
vehicles
, which
is
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are
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known as
cars
.
As well as
this
is becoming the main source of transportation because of its comfort, affordability,
reliability
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and reliability
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,
However
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this
is escalating
an
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alarming rate.
undoubtedly
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the case that urban areas around the world
is
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are
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increasingly suffer from congestion. I examine the reason for
this
trend and suggest some practical policies the government could implement to solve
this
crusial
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crucial
issue. Broadly speaking, there
are
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is
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three main
reason
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reasons
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why
car
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the car
a car
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is
major
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a major
the major
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source of transportation. One is that
cars
has
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become more affordable for the consumer,
Moreover
,
this
is
the
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apply
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no longer
luxury
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a luxury
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item for individuals except
depend
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depending
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on family situations.
Second,
Is that
this
has become
a
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apply
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unreliable in recent years, not least because many of many bus and train services reduced day by day,
thus
because of the difficulty funding them.
In contrast
, There are two basic
probelm
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problem
problems
is persist
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is persisted
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with
this
issue. Pollution is one of
most
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the most
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common problems is seeing in cities because
the
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of the
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large
use
of
cars
.
due
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Due
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to the emissions of
cars
, pollution is increasing as
skyrocket
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.
Furthermore
, congestion is
second
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the second
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main reason
of
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for
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more
use
of private
vehicles
.A successful example of
this
is the congestion charge scheme in London,which has certainly
reduce
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reduced
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the level of traffic and more
use
of private
vehicles
. Imposing a higher amount of
tax
on car ownership is one of the best and
effective
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most effective
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solutions to reduce
the
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apply
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private
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number of private
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vehicle.
For instance
, The
singapore
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Singapore
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government's decision to impose a 100
percent
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per cent
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tax
on
cars
forced many car owners to give up their existing
cars
because of their inability to afford the
tax
.
This
has reduced the increasing
use
of personal
vehicles
.
In addition
, improving the reliability and quality of public transport and
reduce
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reducing
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the fare to make them more affordable. In conclusion,having said that all, there is no doubt that private
vehicles
has
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have
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many advantages, but
due to
high level of emissions and traffic jam
this
becoming
the
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a
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crucial issue. I believe that government could impose
the
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a
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higher amount of
tax
and make
the
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improvements
in
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to
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private
vehicles
.
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