Many people around the world are still relying on the private car as their major mean of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest some solutionsit

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known as
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is becoming the main source of transportation because of its comfort, affordability,
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,
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is escalating
an
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alarming rate.
undoubtedly
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Undoubtedly

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the case that urban areas around the world
is
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increasingly suffer from congestion. I examine the reason for
this
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trend and suggest some practical policies the government could implement to solve
this
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crusial
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issue. Broadly speaking, there
are
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three main
reason
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why
car
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the car
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is
major
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a major
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source of transportation. One is that
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has
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become more affordable for the consumer,
Moreover
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,
this
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is
the
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no longer
luxury
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a luxury

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item for individuals except
depend
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on family situations.
Second,
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Is that
this
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has become
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unreliable in recent years, not least because many of many bus and train services reduced day by day,
thus
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because of the difficulty funding them.
In contrast
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, There are two basic
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is persist
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with
this
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issue. Pollution is one of
most
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common problems is seeing in cities because
the
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large
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of
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to the emissions of
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, pollution is increasing as
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.
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, congestion is
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more
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of private
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.A successful example of
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is the congestion charge scheme in London,which has certainly
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the level of traffic and more
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of private
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. Imposing a higher amount of
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on car ownership is one of the best and
effective
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solutions to reduce
the
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private
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vehicle.
For instance
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government's decision to impose a 100
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on
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forced many car owners to give up their existing
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because of their inability to afford the
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has reduced the increasing
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of personal
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, improving the reliability and quality of public transport and
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the fare to make them more affordable. In conclusion,having said that all, there is no doubt that private
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has
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many advantages, but
due to
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high level of emissions and traffic jam
this
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becoming
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crucial issue. I believe that government could impose
the
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higher amount of
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and make
the
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improvements
in
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private
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