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The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurews and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurews and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the proportion of people consuming
recommended
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the recommended
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amount
 of
fruit
 and
vegetables
 per day in the UK in 3 years 2002, 2006 and 2010.
Overall
, The percentage of women eating
daily
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the daily
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amount
 of recommended
fruit
 and
vegetables
 took the highest ratio over 3 years
while
 the figure for
children
 showed the opposite. Especially, in 2006 the rate in all 3 categories men, women and
children
 reached their peak at 26
percent
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per cent
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, 32
percent
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per cent
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 and 18
percent
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per cent
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 respectively. The number of
man
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men
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 consuming recommended
amount
 of
fruit
 and
vegetables
 per day had an insignificant change, starting at 22
percent
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per cent
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 in 2002,
went
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going
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 up to more than 4
percent
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per cent
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 in 2006 and 2
percent
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per cent
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 in 2010. The proportion of women eating
daily
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the daily
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 suggested
amount
 of
fruit
 and vegetable fluctuated between 2002 and 2010 with a range from 25
percent
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per cent
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 to 32
percent
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per cent
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. The smallest
ration
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ratio
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 in
this
 given chart belongs to the figure for
children
, the number of
children
 eating
fruit
 and
vegetables
 as
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a suggestion
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suggestion
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 in a day go up to its peak
with
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at
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 18
percent
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per cent
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 in 2006 before dropping slightly
2
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to 2
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percent
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per cent
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 in the
last
 year of
given
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the given
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 data.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, fruit, vegetables, children, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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