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The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurews and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurews and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the proportion of people consuming
recommended
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the recommended
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amount
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 of
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 per day in the UK in 3 years 2002, 2006 and 2010.
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, The percentage of women eating
daily
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the daily
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amount
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 of recommended
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 took the highest ratio over 3 years
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 the figure for
children
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 showed the opposite. Especially, in 2006 the rate in all 3 categories men, women and
children
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 reached their peak at 26
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percent
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, 32
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 and 18
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percent
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 respectively. The number of
man
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men
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 consuming recommended
amount
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 of
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 per day had an insignificant change, starting at 22
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percent
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 in 2002,
went
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 up to more than 4
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percent
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 in 2006 and 2
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percent
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 in 2010. The proportion of women eating
daily
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the daily
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 suggested
amount
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 of
fruit
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 and vegetable fluctuated between 2002 and 2010 with a range from 25
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percent
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per cent
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 to 32
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percent
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per cent
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. The smallest
ration
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ratio
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 in
this
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children
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, the number of
children
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 eating
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 as
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a suggestion
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suggestion
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 in a day go up to its peak
with
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 18
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percent
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 in 2006 before dropping slightly
2
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to 2
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percent
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per cent
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 in the
last
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 year of
given
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the given
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 data.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, fruit, vegetables, children, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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