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You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college manager . In your letter, •explain what you like about the cafeteria •say what is wrong with it •suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Mr Black, I am writing to give suggestions for some improvements to our college cafeteria. My name is Milav Soni and I usually eat at it
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lunchtime.
Firstly
, I like the quantity of food you served, and the taste of it is very delicious and unforgettable.
Additionally
, I liked your canteen service at the time of serving. All waiters are very friendly behaviour and there are always smile on their face.
Secondly
, I would like to mention some problems which I found for
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 couple of months. I find that the wall of the cafeteria is very old and it is really needed to refurbish the wall with new
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 and posters.
Furthermore
, the area of the canteen is too cramped, and all chairs are seated very close
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 each other. I think
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 the cafeteria should be space enough so that all are seated in
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 way.
Lastly
, I would like to suggest some solutions for
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wall's
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 problem, you should contact interior designers and will take ideas from them. They might give suitable options as per your idea.
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 problem, you should hire our closed old canteen and use it for more space. I would appreciate your immediate attention regarding
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 matter. I will be happy to supply any
further
 information you require. Best regards, Milav Soni
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