The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts illustrate the number of full-time jobs for UK bachelor's and
master
's pupils after leaving university in 2008. There are four activities the pupils did after leaving college: Part-time work, Voluntary,
further
study, and unemployment.
Overall
, the destinations of UK
graduates
were higher than
postgraduates
in all activities, for both
students
prefer to continue their studies.
Students
working as volunteers were the lowest than others. In 2008, graduate
students
working in part-time jobs was 17,735 higher than
postgraduates
students
at 2,535. Voluntary work is not too famous for
students
which
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
show examples
the number lower than other jobs.
Graduates
students
work as volunteers
was
Change the verb form
were
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3500, and for
postgraduates
was 345. In the same year, 2008, the
students
(
master
's and
postgraduates
) prefer to go for higher education, and the graphs show it was a greater number.
Further
study for
graduates
was 29,669 higher than
master
's
students
at 2,725. Unemployment for
graduates
was 16,235 higher than for
master
's
students
at 1,625.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words master, graduates, postgraduates, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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