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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts illustrate the number of full-time jobs for UK bachelor's and
master
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's pupils after leaving university in 2008. There are four activities the pupils did after leaving college: Part-time work, Voluntary,
further
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 study, and unemployment.
Overall
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, the destinations of UK
graduates
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 were higher than
postgraduates
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 in all activities, for both
students
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 prefer to continue their studies.
Students
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 working as volunteers were the lowest than others. In 2008, graduate
students
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 working in part-time jobs was 17,735 higher than
postgraduates
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students
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 at 2,535. Voluntary work is not too famous for
students
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 which
were
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 the number lower than other jobs.
Graduates
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students
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 work as volunteers
was
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 3500, and for
postgraduates
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 was 345. In the same year, 2008, the
students
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 (
master
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's and
postgraduates
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) prefer to go for higher education, and the graphs show it was a greater number.
Further
Linking Words
 study for
graduates
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 was 29,669 higher than
master
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's
students
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 at 2,725. Unemployment for
graduates
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 was 16,235 higher than for
master
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's
students
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 at 1,625.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words master, graduates, postgraduates, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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