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The table below shows expenditures on advertising of four car companies in the UK in 2002.

The table below shows expenditures on advertising of four car companies in the UK in 2002.
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the table illustrates how much 4 car companies spent on advertising in the UK in the year 2002.
overall
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,
while
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 all companies favoured spending money advertising on television, a meagre sum of money was expended on cinema
advertisements
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 in the surveyed year. looking at detail, in terms of advertising in cinema,
Renault
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 hit its peak of $6
million
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, followed by the figure for
Vauxhall
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 ($5
million
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). the category of rover and cetirizine did not use cinema
advertisements
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.
in contrast
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, the expenditure of cetirizine on television promotion reached $70
million
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,
whereas
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 the amount of money spent by Rover on
this
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 method took up $45
million
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.
furthermore
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, the spending of
Renault
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 and
Vauxhall
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 on TV
advertisements
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 made up $59
million
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 and $65
million
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, respectively.
in addition
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,
Renault
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's expenditure on promoting in press reached $45
million
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, which was 3 times higher than that of cetirizine. whilst only $8
million
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 was given by
Vauxhall
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 on the press advertisement, approximately $38
million
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 of Rover was expended on
this
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. spending on outdoor advertisement was recorded to be highest in
Renault
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 and
Vauxhall
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's companies. remarkably, all manufacturers spent the same budget on radio
advertisements
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, accounting for $ 15
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words advertisements, renault, million, vauxhall with synonyms.
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