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It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#clothes #lots
Some people argue that the best quality clothes with expensive
cost
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 are better than the cheapest ones with low-level quality. I completely agree with
this
 point of view, in forthcoming paragraphs I shall give some details. To being with, many believe that expensive dresses are affordable,because, when you buy a good quality dress it can work for long periods.
As a result
, you do not have to go shopping to purchase a new one.
Moreover
, these types of clothes mostly have a good shape and attractive colour, for ,
instane
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instance
 I have a black and costly jacket that every time I wear , I think is new and beautiful.
secondly
,
for
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buying costly costumes
do
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 not to
need
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 spend more time and waste your time shopping, regarding
this
 issue, there are some
specialty
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 stores that always have a variety of clothes that are appropriate for everyone.
For example
, I know a shoppe that I always buy my dresses from there, in my opinion, it usually has everything I need and does not
toneed
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to need
need
 go and search
another
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 store.
although
 their goods are so expensive.
To sum up
, these truly costly dresses are hard to buy and many people could not spend their money in order to shop. But, as I mentioned
this
 approach is very affordable and
worthwhilewhile
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worthwhile while
, because for some reasons that are mentioned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • long-lasting
  • cost-per-wear
  • economical
  • investing
  • ethical manufacturing
  • transparent
  • exclusivity
  • designs
  • mass-produced
  • accessibility
  • budget
  • fast fashion
  • trends
  • maintenance
  • dry cleaning
  • social status
  • psychological implications
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