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The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information on the ratio of juveniles who have higher education in four different countries from 2000 to 2010.
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, it can be seen that
country
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 D had the highest proportion of young people enrolled in tertiary education for 10 years. In all the countries except
country
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 B, there was an increase in teenagers taking part in schooling. What stands out in
this
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 bar chart is there is a significant upward trend in youth enrollment in universities occurred in
country
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 A and
country
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 D. In 2000, about 38 per
cent
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 of people entered
in
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the high school system,
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this
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 went up to 62 per
cent
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 in 2010, which had a six-in-twenty- five growth in
country
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 A. Meanwhile,
country
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 D
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 had a four-in-twenty-five increase from 2000 to 2010, which rose from 64 per
cent
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 to 80 per
cent
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. In
country
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 C, there was a subtle climb over 10 years, the figures from 46 per
cent
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 in 2000 to 52 per
cent
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 in 2005, and in the next 5 years it was unchanged.
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,
country
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 B has a fluctuation in the share of young people to have a higher education. The data dropped from 46 per
cent
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 to 41 per
cent
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 in 2005 and
then
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, had a one-in-five growth which reached 43 per
cent
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 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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