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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the results of
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research
about
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 how and how many
people
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 consume
coffee
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 or tea in some Australian
cities
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. The research was done in the following five
cities
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: Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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 and Hobart.
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, folk prefer to go to a cafe for their drinks in
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most
of
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the
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cities
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. The trend
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 shows that individuals most likely would buy an instant
coffee
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, rather than a fresh one. Three
cities
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 (Sydney,
Adelaide
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 and Hobart) look pretty much the same percentage-wise.
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 all of them, more than 60%
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people
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of people
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 visited a cafe to buy a
coffee
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 or
a
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tea during the
last
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 4 weeks. The next liked drink in these
cities
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 is instant
coffee
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, more than 45%
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people
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of people
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 bought it in Sydney and Melbourne, and in
Hobart
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,Hobart
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 the number is just under 55%. Two other
cities
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also
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 share some
simularities
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similarities
. In both Brisbane and
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Adelaide
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,Adelaide
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 less than 35%
individuals
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of individuals
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 bought fresh
coffee
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thoughout
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throughout
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last
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 28 days, and it is the lowest value among all
cities
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 included in the research. It should be mentioned,
however
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, that
Adelaide
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 is the only city, where
people
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 prefer instant
coffee
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 the most; around 50% did it during the
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 period.
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