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Some people think tourism should be banned while some disagree. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #tourism #disagree
Tourism
 should be banned and has become an integral part of the rising debate in the present world.
While
 some proponents are in
favor
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, other opponents are completely against the relevance of
tourism
 should be banned.In my opinion,
tourism
 and supporting
tourism
 has more positive impacts than negative one around the globe. To commence with, there are a number of arguments that are in
favor
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 of my belief. The most prominent one is an article published in a daily newspaper completely supporting
tourism
.
According to
 research conducted by Western Sydney University, more than 69 per cent of people in Australia are aware of the significance of
tourism
.
On the other hand
 , critics may point out that one of the most significant
disadvantage
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 is that many foreigners do not go back to their countries.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the United States reveals that more than 95 per cent of Americans are completely
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favor
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 of
tourism
.
To conclude
 ,even though there are many demerits associated with gender equality, the advantage
outweigh
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 the disadvantage of
tourism
. it is a crucial part of life and has more applications in real life. The argument is in
favor
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 of
tourism
. and
tourism
 should be supported.
However
 ,excessive misuse should be condemned.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural dilution
  • economic dependency
  • economic development
  • cultural exchange
  • conservation efforts
  • responsible tourism
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • influx
  • overreliance
  • indigenous populations
  • global economic fluctuations
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • preservation efforts
  • vulnerable
  • revenue
  • habitats
  • endangered species
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