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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, developed
countries
 provide financial aid to undeveloped
countries
,
however
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 it is not key to
solve
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this
 issue. But, rich
countries
 have to assist
other genre
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another genre
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 of help to poor
countries
instead
 of
money
.
Firstly
, most
of
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apply
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rich
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the rich
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countries
 avoid
money
 help to give
richness
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countries
.
Therefore
, poor
countries
 need financial aid to develop.
Moreover
, there are several types of
helps
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help
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such
 as human resources and military assistance so in my opinion, these are more
usefel
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useful
 for poor
countries
. most people believe that rich
countries
 should provide
knowledge
 in order to redevelop and improve their finance
for example
,
buld
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build
 a high quality of
uneversity
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university
 and leisure sites that can help people in the country for the future as
knowledge
 is the most important thing for every
countries
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country
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.
On the other hand
, there are health issues in poorer
countries
 so huge
countries
 should give some
engeners
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engineers
 to
constarct
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contact
contract
construct
hospital
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hospitals
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 and
high quality
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high-quality
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of
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markets because there
needs
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need
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 to be healthy cuisines and new technology
of
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in
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clinic
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clinics
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.
In addition
,
in
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apply
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these days,
money
 can not help people to live
healthy
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due to
 rich
countries
 can not save but they can change their lifestyle and environment for
next
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the next
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 generation. The
countries
 that want to assist have to aim next generation to develop in the future.
To sum up
, rich
countries
 should avoid
money
 to help poor cities and
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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due to
there
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their
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needs
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need
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to
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for
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knowledge
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the knowledge
a knowledge
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 of the world and
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle. providing
skillful
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skilful
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 tutors and talented
engeners
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engineers
 who have
variety
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a variety
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 of
knowledge
 is the most important aid.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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