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The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars?

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In modern society, possessing a car became a scale to measure prosperity and wealth. The advantages of owning a car are many.
Although
 there are countable negative impacts as well.
This
 essay will expound on some of the problems associated with the
usage
 of
cars
 and why should people consider not using
cars
 frequently.
To begin
 with, the
usage
 of
cars
 has notable drawbacks in the environment
such
 as carbon emission, global warming, ozone layer depletion, and increased traffic jams. The extensive
usage
 of automobiles including
cars
 emits a tremendous amount of carbon which facilitates the major issues of the environment like global warming and ozone layer depletion. A study conducted in 2014 at SASTRA University, Thanjavur found that car exhaust smoke is the primary factor for global warming in Tamilnadu (37%) compared to industrial air pollution (32%).
On the other hand
, to reduce carbon emissions and keep the environment safe, the
usage
 of
cars
 should really be reduced drastically.
This
 can be achieved by preferring to walk to the nearest destinations, considering by-cycles for short distances and public transport for long travels.
In addition
, Government should
also
 consider implementing non-fossil fuel vehicles
such
 as hydrogen-powered automobiles and electric vehicles.
However
, government alone cannot achieve
this
 and it is our responsibility too to protect and safeguard nature as an individual. To encapsulate, the negative effects of
usage
 of
cars
 are severe and they are directly related to our mother nature and it is our responsibility to contribute as much as possible to protect it.
Hence
 people are encouraged to mitigate the
usage
 of
cars
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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