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In many countries, people do not recycle waste material, such as paper glass and cans. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve these problem?

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In developing countries, it is true to say that people are still lacking their knowledge about the recycling process. In the upcoming ,paragraphs I will discuss the reasons of arising
this
 issue and
also
 some suggestions that would be given by me. The first cause is that
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 societies think that they have to pay something to recycle the products. So,
instead
 of paying something to the
government
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 they try to burn these products. Which future, put a bad impact on the environment.
Secondly
, communities think that paper glass and cans can be reused after a wash and can be preserved for the future
as well as
 by doing
this
 they are saving money.
However
, legal authorities can play a very important role to stop
this
 issue , the government should set a minimum amount for recycling products,
therefore
,
therefore
 people can afford to do recycling.
Moreover
, legal parties should
also
 set some strict roles for proper waste and for those who would not follow these rules
then
 the government should put some penalty on them to save the environment. In conclusion, the community should understand the importance of recycling to save the environment and
also
 aid in neat and
clean
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sounding areas and make the world beautiful.
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