The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Australia in 2010 and 2015.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Australia in 2010 and 2015.
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The pie charts illustrate the online
sales
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of various essential shopping
items
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in Australia between the years 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, throughout the years most
items
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purchased online are electric and appliance, closely followed by food & beverage and home furnishing which gain a similar percentage. Meanwhile, a considerable number of units sold on gift
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and books,
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a notable decrease in video game
sales
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after a 5-year period. In 2010, 27% of
items
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sold online goes to electric & appliance, rising to 33% by 2015. Trailing behind the drink and food sector and home furnishing sector, where both years shared one-fifth
sales
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of the total proportion. On one hand, a different trend can be observed in the
sales
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of video games online with approximately 19%
sales
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in 2010,
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experiencing a sizable drop (about 8%) after a half-decade.
On the other hand
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, an opposite trend happened in the online
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for gift
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and books from 7% and 4% in 2010, increasing to 11% and 7%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, items with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail sectors
  • online shopping sales
  • growth trend
  • declined
  • remained stable
  • fastest-growing sectors
  • technological advancements
  • consumer behaviour
  • marketing strategies
  • market saturation
  • competition
  • consumer preferences
  • emerged
  • innovation
  • product/service offerings
  • spending habits
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • technological factors
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