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some people think that it is a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends . other people think it is important to keep working life completely separate from social life . discuss boyh these views and give youe own opinion .

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Some individuals claim that
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 with coworkers apart from the workplace is a normal thing and we can set some plans to get together for weekends.
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 some believe that we should not communicate with our colleagues after
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work
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time
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. In the forthcoming , paragraphs I shall discuss both views and give my opinion. On the one hand, there are
people
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 who believe
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 are not relevant to our surroundings, and,
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 always can find close friends from everywhere.
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, they say most of the
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 our best friends are our coworkers because we spend more
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 with them rather than others, as a
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result we can find a lot in common.
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, I
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 for a big railway company and we communicate with each other all the
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,
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, we are very similar.
on the other hand
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 some reasons, many
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 do not interested in their colleagues
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 about their personal life.
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, they believe that we should separate our
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 milieu from our family and accommodation.
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, maybe they do not have adequate friend
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, but, still insist coworkers are not an appropriate case for friendship.
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 do not tend to have a family relationship with their
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people
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. In conclusion,
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people
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 can have their own opinions,
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, in my opinion,
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 can be done in every situation and it is not related to our condition. we can build a good relationship in every circumstance and condition.
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