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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart detailed above delineates the transformation of
birth
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 and loss of life rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that the size of
birth
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 dominated a large proportion in the 20th century
whereas
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 the ratio of
death
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 will probably overtake the childbirth quota in the future. Between 1901 and the present day, the share of
birth
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 always kept a higher percentage than
death
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,
furthermore
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, it hit a high of 66,000in 1961, which had a dramatic increase of nearly 50,000
people
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. After 1961, the
birth
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 rate had a slight decline to 50,000 from 1961 to 1981,
then
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 experienced a 10,000 growth until 2001, it is expected to decline slowly to around 45,000
people
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at the end
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 of
this
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 century.
In contrast
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, the
death
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 rate started below 10,000 and increase steadily until the present day. After that, it climbed substantially from almost 28,000
people
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 in 2001 to peak at nearly 60,000
people
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 in 2061. Before dropping slightly in 2021, the
death
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 rate will probably level off.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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