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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In recent times,increased the use of modern technology
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, phones and laptops. Some individuals believe that
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 helps
people
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 to conduct with anyone and anywhere,
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others
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 think that it may lead to isolation and discourage
people
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 from socialising. In my opinion, I totally agree with the former statement.
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internet
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 is very useful and
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 helpful finding in the world. It helps in many ways
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 as making conduct with
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 and getting information about everything in the universe. The main advantage of
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 is helping to communicate with anyone. To put on another way, some apps, which is work with the help of
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 namely Whatsapp, Instagram and so on. These apps help.
People
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 make their life socialising, building friendships with
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 and
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 helping to communicate with long-distance friends and relatives.
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, the
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 is a platform for talented
people
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. There are manifold ways to share skills with
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. To explain, apps
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 as YouTube and Instagram gave a good platform to identify and show their talents and
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 help to gain public figure positions which
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 them socializing their life.
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, there are millions of youtube content creators and insta influencers in the world through the help of the
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. They gain fame and money. In conclusion,Some individuals believe that the
Internet
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 helps
people
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 to conduct with anyone and anywhere ,
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,
others
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 think that it may lead to isolation and discourage
people
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 from socializing. In my opinion, the
internet
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 is a good finding to connect to
others
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 and
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 helps
people
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 to encourage in socialise their life.
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