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Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones, or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion. Some people believe that if people are allowed to work

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This
 topic is interesting because people are buying new gadgets, phones, or laptops for any need. I can say that good or bad thing from my point of view. Buying new
equipment
 can be good of
because
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 any reason.
First,
to support any work, by the office or by home. If buying new
equipment
 can improve your skills
,
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 so that a clever choice to buy new
equipment
 to improve your skills and have a better salary.
Secondly
, to do business. Business with other people is very important because building a network in recent times is very needed. Buy new
equipment
such
 as gadgets, phones, or laptops can develop any business network so is a good choice to buy these.
Lastly
, to gain information in social media, online newspapers, and online magazines. In the 5.0 generation, that's very important to have applied information about anything in the world because we don't want to let anyone from don't know about anything. So, buying new
equipment
 is good from any perspective if buying these can be easier our life.
Thus
, buying new
equipment
 can be bad of
because
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 any reason. If buying new
equipment
 makes me evil or a scam, so that's a very bad attitude. People that are fond of buying new
equipment
 are very bad because that greedy. Buying new
equipment
 is very bad if the purpose is to make harder our or anyone's life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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