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In the future, it seems more difficult to live on Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching another planet to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is often suggested that it will be more difficult to live on the globe in
next
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 days, and some individuals believe that finding an alternative planet for living and consuming more money to do it is needed. I strongly disagree with
this
 view because there are too many resources that are waiting for
explore
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 and the
evidences
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evidence
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 of other planets’ vital signs
are
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 still limited. The exploration of new sources of the Earth is crucial.
According to
 some
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research
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researches
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 the vast majority of reserves are depleting.
However
, there are still new resources which might help to survive all the people on the globe
such
 as natural gas sources in the seas.
Additionally
, the governments
ouhgt
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ought
 have a policy that spending
big
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 amount of money from the budget to invest
these
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in these
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 new findings in terms of
provide
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 sustainable living conditions to coming generations. In Turkey, recent news
have
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 shown that the
goverment
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government
 is so close to
transfer
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a
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new natural gas
in
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Black
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 Sea after a few processes which
is
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very
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 significant finding for Turkey
as well as
 the European countries
. .
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The scientists
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Scientists
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 are still wondering that the other planet’s sign of vitality and
many researches
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much research
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 have been
doing
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done
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 by the developed nations. Unfortunately, there are still some doubts
whether
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 is there a
live
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life
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 or not.
Furthermore
,
while
 some may predict that keep living on
the
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Earth will be impossible and need to look
an
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other
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another
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 planet, I tend to believe
that is
imposible
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impossible
 without
a
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proof. As an example, Elon Musk’s company, SpaceX, have been searching for
an
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evidence of
livelines
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liveliness
lifelines
 for many years,
however
, there is no current
publish
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publication
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 about it by the company. In conclusion, I totally
disaggre
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disagree
 that human-being need to explore
other planet
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another planet
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 to live without any proof, and
also
 we have to be aware of our reserves which are still there.
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