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The chart below show the proportion of income spent on different areas by one university, in 2005 and 2015.

The chart below show the proportion of income spent on different areas by one university, in 2005 and 2015.
#show #proportion #income #areas #university
The two pie charts show the change
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 income spent by one university, in 2005 and 2015. From the charts, teaching and research is the most proportion of income spent in both 2005 and 2015. There were some categories
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 decreased.
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 accommodation and libraries. These were respectively from 16% to 8% and from 10% to 5%. These were decreased
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2015, the most portion was teaching and research. But, it
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 declined slightly from 53% to 48%.
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 some categories. The most
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 case was administration and management. It
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surprisingly
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increased
 over double than before, from 6% to 16%.
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 were maintaining campuses and financial support for students. These were respectively, 15% and 8%. In conclusion, there were some changes
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 spending but the largest portion of
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 was teaching and research in both years.
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