These days people pay more attention to famous film stars than to famous scientists. Why is this happening? Explain the trend, giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Recently, it is thought that people concentrate on celebrities in famous films than well-known scientists,
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care much about science topics. For me, it is reasonable of doing so. The majority of people, especially the young generations have a bad tendency to science because it’s too complex for them to understand and makes them hard to find anything interesting
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the topic.
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, they have a subculture of watching things that inspired them with joy
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as movies,
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big film celebrities always got under the watch of media companies that usually gives many fake news and big dramas to catch the attention of the public more than the researcher. The first reason is that humans like to do leisure activities that
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their intellectual ability in order to relax after a busy day, for ,example teenagers watch blockbuster movies rather than
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at a biology documentary when they have free time.
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humans are always curious and have many things to discuss
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movie stars, whether if it is a fact or not
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as the celebrities’ relationship with others than their family,
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research which they
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have enough
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knowledge to discuss and so on.
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but not least, the public, especially social media has
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bad sympathy
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persons who is an armchair scientist In conclusion, as I mentioned above, individuals
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pay much attention to famous researchers as film celebrities, which is a fact that
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have a tendency, right of doing something they would like to do.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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