Nowadays children play computer games for long hours. They do not play old traditional games. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think it influences children in a good or bad way?
Now a days
, the mode of games has diverted Correct the word
Nowadays
into
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to
online
format from outdoor entertainment Add an article
an online
by
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for
the
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children
. Around 90% of kids and their parents focusing
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focus
onto
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on
the
technology Correct article usage
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inorder
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in order
distract
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to distract
from
themselves. Change preposition
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upcoming paragraphs provided some Change preposition
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of
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the
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the
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children
in life.
Firstly
, most of the parents were committed to busy
work Correct article usage
a busy
environment
and Fix the agreement mistake
environments
live
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lived
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a megacity
megacity
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megacities
while
at beginning
stage of family life. Add an article
the beginning
Therefore
, children
at young
age will grow Add an article
a young
in
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up in
the
multi-storey buildings Correct article usage
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where
don't have enough space to play with neighbours Correct word choice
that
as well as
with their family members. Secondly
, a wide development of technology especially the
smartphones, Correct article usage
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the
computers and other electronic devices promoted everyone as Correct article usage
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imperative
matter Correct article usage
an imperative
accordingly
in their daily routine. Everyone specifically children
pointing
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points
on
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to
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reasons
early
stage Add an article
the early
an early
itself
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they
forgetting
about outdoor sports.
As kids Wrong verb form
forget
spends
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spend
a
time within the four corners of Correct article usage
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wall
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the wall
a wall
which
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it
create
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creates
them
a kind of mental Correct pronoun usage
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exahustion
. Since they are sitting Correct your spelling
exhaustion
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a particular place for Change preposition
in
couple
of hours and playing numerous Change the article
a couple
time
will impact Fix the agreement mistake
times
a
physical weakness and various health issues like Correct article usage
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the problem
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problems
eyesights
, back pain and other internal Correct your spelling
eyesight
health related
defects. Add a hyphen
health-related
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involvement
a
public matters Remove the article
apply
drastically
reduced, Add a missing verb
is drastically
therefore
the knowledge of manners in the
society couldn't able to train Correct article usage
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up
from childhood by Change preposition
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gaurdians
.
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guardians
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, the behaviour of the children
become
worse at Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
early
stage.
In summary, modern technology will Add an article
an early
deteriorat
the new generation Correct your spelling
deteriorate
due to
excess usage of it. By
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In
this
way, external or physical game involvement by the kids will be extinct upon
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in
coming
days and make Correct article usage
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