Many people are involved in sports when they are young but stop once they are adult, why do many adults stop doing physical exercise? what can be done about this problem.

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participate in games during their 20's.
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period they generally tend to avoid playing
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of reasons
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own solutions. Both
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and remedies are discussed in
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paragraphs. One of the prominent
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is physical stability. At
young
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age
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a person's muscular and bone strength is high which tends to lessen after
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age. Another reason is responsibility towards family. After getting married, people do not get enough
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for physical
acitivity
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activity
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is divided between family and office. A recent survey of
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in
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30's
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75 persons out of 100
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not played their favourite
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since completion of school. In order to
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up
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situation, a company should open up a
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pool for
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employees so that they can spend free
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after physical exercise. In
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sector, there should be
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reward
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for
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players in order to motivate them.
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, if a player wins
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for his state, he should be promoted earlier. In conclusion, though there are many obstacles
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persitant
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persistent
interest in playing
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games
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, devoting
a
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time
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for
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sports
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is necessary for good health.
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