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Some believe that teaching children at home is the best for child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

#believe #children #home #child’s #development #school #methods
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People have different opinions on choosing
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 way of teaching children, some will say moving to academic culture will make them
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understand about
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the importance
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 of manners and others like should learn from home.
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 me, initial education must be from home and later should
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 throughout the school. Every
parents
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 has
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responsibilities
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 to look after their upcoming generation in
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well defined
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 manner. At the age of four, children start to see
world
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 with
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face
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 of character
inorder
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 to overcome
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, each individual should
trained
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 from their home. So
own
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house
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a house
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 traditional will be the first chapter
should
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 learn by everyone. The way of presentation towards a school teacher and response to a question asked by
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a stranger
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 or any family member must be taught by family members. I am accepting
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 these statements given by an individual that basic things should learn from family.
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, once a child
reach
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to
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academic life,
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along with
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 core should learn various subjects to gain knowledge to handle
the
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society. Various
task
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 must be assigned to test how a person could beat the barrier and conclude the destination. Not only exams of topics will decide but
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 behavioural
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 shall
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 during educational life.
On
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same
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the same
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 way, each
gaurdian
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guardian
have
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 a role to carry forward throughout until they reach to mature. In conclusion, at the beginning of life house is the place where children must learn things but late should be
carry
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 forward by
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the institution
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institution
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tailored learning environment
  • deeper understanding
  • retention of knowledge
  • strong familial bonds
  • supportive and nurturing environment
  • diverse range of peers
  • promoting social skills
  • structured curriculums
  • specialized resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • real-world challenges
  • personal development
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