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Nowadays people prefer to shop in large supermarkets rather than nearby local shops. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

#people #shop #supermarkets #shops #trend
Number
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 of
malls
are
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is
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 increasing in
metropolition
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metropolitan
 areas as most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people tend to buy things from these
super markets
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supermarkets
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 rather than buying it from street shops
now a days
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nowadays
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.
This
 situation has
arise
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 because
of
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for
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number
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a number
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 of different reason which has both positive and negative effects. The foremost reason for favouring
this
 scenario is
,
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availability
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the availability
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 of different goods
at
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in
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same
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the same
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 place. A shopper can buy
grocery
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groceries
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,vegetables,clothes
etcetra
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etcetera
 from
mall
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the mall
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instead
 of
wondering
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wandering
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 from one shop to another shop.
In addition
 to
this
,
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 are cheaper in
super
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supermalls
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malls
 as compared to local shops.
Moreover
, more options are available to a customer in supermarkets.
For instance
, an individual who wants to purchase clothes
,
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 has more options of brands in a shopping centre in
comparision
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comparison
 with
local
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a local
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vendor
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vendors
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.
In
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On
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Contrary
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, buying from a mart can lead to
over time
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overtime
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 spending because
while
 roaming in
mall
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the mall
a mall
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 a person can waste his time
in
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apply
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checking unnecessary goods.
In addition
, it may lead to
over spending
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overspending
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 as well.
Lastly
,
malls
 have ruined
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the bussiness
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bussiness
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business
 of local vendors. An independent survey reported
last
 week states that 30% of local shops have been closed after
opening
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the opening
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 of Alpha Mall in Ahmedabad. In conclusion,
although
,
malls
 are
biggest
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the biggest
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 contributors to
economy
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the economy
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,
livelihood
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the livelihood
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 of local shopkeepers has been ruined
beacuse
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because
 of
super stores
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superstores
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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