The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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line graph illustrates average
carbon dioxide Correct article usage
the average
emissions
in four different countries for each person in metric tonnes.
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pollution generally declined in the UK and Sweden while
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the amount of CO2 in the UK dropped from almost 11 to 9 ,it has stood the highest emissions
per person until 2007. it is also
maintained that,
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of Sweden firstly
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it was starting to go down and remain roughly
5 in 2007. Sweden was one of the lowest countries of Co2 Change preposition
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emissions
per person in 2007.
in addition
, the average of carbon dioxide kept rising from about 1 to 5 metric tonnes in Portugal though, it was the lowest rate during the given period. also
, the amount of Co2 in Italy increased sharply from roughly 4 to 8 in 2007 while
, increasing slightly after 1997.Submitted by amirhsina on
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