The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
this
line graph illustrates average
carbon dioxide Correct article usage
the average
emissions
in four different countries for each person in metric tonnes.
it is clear that
,
the amount of Remove the comma
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this
pollution generally declined in the UK and Sweden while
,
these statistics increased in Italy and Portugal in the period Remove the comma
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of
question.
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in
according to
, although
the amount of CO2 in the UK dropped from almost 11 to 9 ,it has stood the highest emissions
per person until 2007. it is also
maintained that,
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emissions
of Sweden firstly
was
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a
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significant
rose from above 8 to 10 in 1977, Change the word
significantly
then
it was starting to go down and remain roughly
5 in 2007. Sweden was one of the lowest countries of Co2 Change preposition
at roughly
emissions
per person in 2007.
in addition
, the average of carbon dioxide kept rising from about 1 to 5 metric tonnes in Portugal though, it was the lowest rate during the given period. also
, the amount of Co2 in Italy increased sharply from roughly 4 to 8 in 2007 while
, increasing slightly after 1997.Submitted by amirhsina on
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