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Over the past few decades with the help of internet an unimaginable amount of information has become widely available to the public. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In recent years, using the
internet
 is becoming increasingly popular. For many
people
access
 to the
internet
 to improve their
knowledge
 about any
information
 is an attractive one.
However
, there are both pros and cons to deciding to use
this
. In
this
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access
 to the
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 range of
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data
 is so helpful and some of the challenges to
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over come
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. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of
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 huge amount of
data
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public users, one of the main positives of heading
information
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internet
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the internet
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 is that it
broaden
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 your
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horizons
. What I mean by
this
 is that
,
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 you have the chance to
improvement
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 your
knowledge
 and
expriences
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experiences
experience
 with
this
 and it would
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 almost for free.
This
make
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 you more rounded as a person.
Secondly
, it could gain you a better quality of life. The fast pace of
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data
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scholars, the
proffesors
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professors
 and students in universities
for example
.
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 as a part of the puzzles of the future world with
access
 to the
data
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internet
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 often try to
searching
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about
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for
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 new methods for sciences and it could not be done without
access
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ordinary
people
 and public persons to
internet
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for
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sharing their
information
 on the network. Online networks could improve the promotion
prsopects
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prospects
 in our turn. Turning to the other side of the argument, many governments in the world find it hard to cope with
people
could
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access
to
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security
information
 that
have
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high
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 risk for their country or even our plan.
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 is not safe because all of the time hackers try to steal
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high value
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information
 and use
this
 for
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 somewhere or
distructing
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distracting
destructing
.
The
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information
 of the PENTAGON of the USA
for instance
, several weeks ago hackers share the most important
information
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 the United States and it was really
damageful
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damage
 for
this
 country and even
rest
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 of the world. In conclusion, sharing
information
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online platforms is not never safe for
people
 and
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.
However
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 you need to
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weight up
weigh up
 the cons of
cyber attacks
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cyber-attacks
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, stealing high
values
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data
 and the pros of increasing
knowledge
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the knowledge
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 of many
people
, accessing
people
 to
others
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exprience
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experience
 about any situation and so on. Personally, I believe the pros of
growth
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knowledge
 of humanity eventually
outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
 any
negative
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negatives
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.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital age
  • information superhighway
  • cyberspace
  • data deluge
  • online resources
  • virtual connectivity
  • e-learning
  • content curation
  • digital literacy
  • fact-checking
  • misinformation
  • filter bubble
  • online privacy
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